Friday, June 25, 2010

Flash 55 – stream of consciousness

could I be any further behind
the eight ball
in the side pocket
full of posies
ashes, ashes,
dust to dust
bunnies under the bed
what are you so afraid of
your own shadow
dancing , baby you do it right
the first time ever
i saw your face
the music of the heart
beat
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Write a story in exactly 55 words.
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17 comments:

  1. Well I had my boogie shoes on reading this. Well done and very clever :)

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  2. It were the cheese, weren't' it me dear. Mine is mere demonic temptation in this week's 55!

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  3. A lot behind each phrase of this 55words. Very good.

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  4. This is good, Nessa. So good too that it is all printable.

    So did that heart beat go 'pitty pat, pitty pat,' or 'thumpity thump thump.' Or was is like a frightened heart about to have a heart attack?
    ..
    BTW, you should feel honored being that you are getting my first note written from London in a long time!
    ..

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  5. Feels good just to let the mind unravel occasionally.

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  6. This so fits my day today. Thank you for writing it for me.

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  7. I haven't heard or thought of the song, First time ever I saw your face, for a long time.

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  8. Jive talking, packs a punch.

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  9. I'm so behind, but your post got me into an energetic mood. Great!

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  10. You are so creative. I can't take it : )

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  11. I feel--have felt--this one. Thanks for putting these words down.

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